i have a website, www.elvexonine.co.uk and i tried some email marketing , i emailed cycling shops, shooting shops and shops which supply building equipment all my emails were slightly different and i emailed a mixture of big and small company’s and out of 14 not a single one responded not even to say no. Here is what i put for some emails , it changed a little on some emails but i used it alot: —

"Hi

my name is Leo Stamatiou i turn 14 in June and i have recently set up an online shop selling Elvex – a high quality brand of safety wear. I focus on selling the safety glasses. I was hoping that if you get a second you could take a look at my website – www.elvexonline.co.uk and see if they think you could incorporate them into your website. I do not have much traffic on website as of yet but i am confident that if a larger website like your featured Elvex you would have no trouble selling them. I could of course offer you a huge discount and you could sell them and get a £2 return on every £1 you buy, if you were to buyout all my stock you would make £30,000 and like i said i am sure Elvex will sell. If you are not sure i could offer you a sample so you can check they meet the bill. Thanks for your time please get back to me on this adress ( leo.0123@hotmail.com )

Yours Faithfully, Leo Stamatiou. "

Whats wrong with that how can i improve it , why did they not respond?